Chapter 23 began with a description of the setting. You know the type – the sun sparkled off the water, houses built of grey stone, etc. The main character did not appear until the third paragraph, and she did nothing but marvel at the view until in the fifth paragraph another character appeared.
It was "lights, camera, action" in a slow sequence. No. I need action first, get the characters on the stage, then work in the setting and light as seen through their cameras.
The setting will not be the way the author envisions it, not the way a picture shows it, but how the characters see it. And in this scene, one is entranced, the other bored.
Another thing to watch for as I do my final edit!
– Cat
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