Chapter
23 began with a description of the setting. You know the type – the sun
sparkled off the water, houses built of grey stone, etc. The main
character did not appear until the third paragraph, and she did nothing
but marvel at the view until in the fifth paragraph another character
appeared.
It
was "lights, camera, action" in a slow sequence. No. I need action
first, get the characters on the stage, then work in the setting and
light as seen through their cameras.
The
setting will not be the way the author envisions it, not the way a
picture shows it, but how the characters see it. And in this scene, one
is entranced, the other bored.
Another thing to watch for as I do my final edit!
– Cat